Ultimate Betrayal

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Ultimate Betrayal

Post  loving-you on Fri Feb 27, 2009 11:35 am

You've thrown away our precious love
she stole you with her grasp
slithering inbetween our life's
striking like an asp.
Do you regret one single moment
that weakness within you?
hypnotic eyes that took away
true love that we once knew.
You're asking for forgiveness
begging with emotion
but still you lack a thing they call
true love and pure devotion.
Marriage vows? Don't make me laugh
they're words you tossed aside
you may have broke my beating heart
but I still have my pride.

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Re: Ultimate Betrayal

Post  PenJen on Fri Feb 27, 2009 12:38 pm

loving-you wrote:You've thrown away our precious love
she stole you with her grasp
slithering inbetween our life's
striking like an asp.
Do you regret one single moment
that weakness within you?
hypnotic eyes that took away
true love that we once knew.
You're asking for forgiveness
begging with emotion
but still you lack a thing they call
true love and pure devotion.
Marriage vows? Don't make me laugh
they're words you tossed aside
you may have broke my beating heart
but I still have my pride.

The rhyme is excellent and your choice of words are descriptive and powerful. Loved it! Smile
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